IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 8

Some people believe that governments should pay full course fees for students who want to study in universities. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
As some individuals argue that governments must cover all the course
fees
Use synonyms
 for university
students
Use synonyms
, I agree with complete funding
support
Use synonyms
 for the undergraduates because
this
Linking Words
 will help a lot of households and
this
Linking Words
 will
support
Use synonyms
 talented
students
Use synonyms
 to contribute to society a lot.
Although
Linking Words
 the tuition
fees
Use synonyms
 for academia are very expensive, there are many
students
Use synonyms
 in the world who resign from entering college because they can’t afford it even though they are smart and only if the course
fees
Use synonyms
 were free for any eligible individual, many households would be able to gain more payment in the future.
For example
Linking Words
, in Japan or other developed nations, military schools are usually free for domestic
students
Use synonyms
 and
this
Linking Words
 works very well for achieving the individual's goal which
further
Linking Words
 enables them to gain more money even after they finish the mandatory deployment because they can work at a better company than they would have worked without a bachelor's degree.
Furthermore
Linking Words
, equal financial
support
Use synonyms
 for the
students
Use synonyms
 leads to the
further
Linking Words
 flourishment of one country.
That is
Linking Words
 to say, no one knows if someone is talented and is going to contribute more to the country from just a look at the certificate of achievements. By supporting everyone in universities, a country can produce more talented and motivated
students
Use synonyms
.
For instance
Linking Words
, in Japan, there are several medical schools without any tuition
fees
Use synonyms
 and the
students
Use synonyms
 there are generally more concentrated on what they want to pursue, more independent and more confident in themselves than those in other medical schools and they tend to work harder than anybody else. In conclusion, I totally agree with the idea of the government paying all the
fees
Use synonyms
 for university
students
Use synonyms
; it can
support
Use synonyms
 many households, it produces equality of chance and it leads to the maturity of a nation.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph transitions smoothly. While the logical structure is strong, the flow can be improved by using more transitional phrases between ideas.
task achievement
Introduce counterarguments briefly to show a balanced perspective, enhancing the depth of the argument.
task achievement
The essay provides a clear and comprehensive response to the prompt, addressing the topic directly and supporting the main points effectively.
coherence cohesion
Introduction and conclusion are present and effectively frame the essay. They correlate well with the main content of the essay.
task achievement
Examples given are relevant and support the argument. They add weight to the points made about financial support and societal benefits.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Higher education
  • University tuition
  • Public good
  • Economic growth
  • Fiscal responsibility
  • Merit-based scholarships
  • Need-based grants
  • Socioeconomic status
  • Educational equity
  • Income-contingent loans
  • Graduate tax
  • Financial aid
  • Student loans
  • Subsidize
  • Taxpayer funding
  • Underappreciation
  • Workforce development
  • Access to education
  • Higher learning institutions
  • Government expenditure
What to do next:
Look at other essays: