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The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities.

The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities.
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The table compares the length of the route and the number of passengers per
year
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 in millions of underground railway systems in six cities.
It is clear that
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London
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 has the oldest
subway
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system
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,
while
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, the newest one is for Los Angeles.
Also
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, we could see that
Tokyo
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's metro
system
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 has by far the most passengers each
year
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.
London
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's underground railway arrangement opened in 1863, which is the oldest
subway
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 scheme in the table, and the newest one provided by Los Angeles opened in 2001. Paris opened its underground transportation
system
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 in 1900, and 27 years later, in 1926, the
subway
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system
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 in
Tokyo
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 started to work. Washington DC and Kyoto opened their
subway
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system
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 in 1976 and 1981, respectively. With 394 kilometres,
London
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 has by far the longest route of the underground railway,
while
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 Kyoto and Los Angeles have the least, below 30 kilometres. The length of the underground
system
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 route of the Paris,
Tokyo
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, and Washington DC are between 126 and 199 kilometres. About the number of passengers, with 1927
million
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 people each
year
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,
Tokyo
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's metro
system
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 transportation placed at the top, and the second one provided by Paris with 1191
million
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 people.
While
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 775
million
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 citizens use
London
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's underground transportation systems each
year
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, the number for the other three countries is below 150
million
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 people per
year
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year, london, subway, system, tokyo, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "provided" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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