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In some parts of the world, students are required to pass an entrance exam in order to be able to enter university. What are the advantages and disadvantages of passing an entrance exam?

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The debate over the significance of requiring to pass an
exam
 to get into college has sparked considerable controversy. In my opinion, despite the mere drawbacks
this
 phenomenon may bring, its merits are substantial as
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further
 elaborates on. One major benefit of
this
 notion is that when students step out of their comfort zone to deal with the challenge of
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 an
exam
,
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 may give them more straightness to face difficulties once they get into university.
Furthermore
, the preparation they need to have done before the actual test is
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 they start developing skills that would make them
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pursue
 bigger goals than those who do not need to
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. As an example, it has been researched that those fellas
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 had presented an
exam
 to be chosen for the university, have had more success in their professional
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due to
 the qualities they developed during their studies. In
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addition
, the effort they had made to get into it is the same that they will keep until their
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graduation
 day.
However
, the downfalls of
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 should not be overlooked. One significant disadvantage is the potential lack of confidence
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 of the nerves to pass, which could lead
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 failure. It is
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believed
 that the latter can make them develop doubts in their knowledge,
although
 they could be perfectly ready for it. To
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illustrate
, picture a high school pupil who has always been the smarter in his class, but he has never been good
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. At the moment that he
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 to
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 the
exam
, the anxiety gets
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overwhelmed
 and
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 everything he had studied,
therefore
 he failed.
This
 does not mean he was not good enough, but he might start
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believing
 that. Despite the fact that some people have the mental skills to retain the information, is
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essential
 to have the emotional ones to work
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environments
environment
 with success.
To conclude
, in my personal opinion, the advantages
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 the disadvantages of the discussion above because
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 going to make you work harder to achieve your ambitions and
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 starts with getting into the university you want. If you have to do an examination, you will need to be prepared for it and
that is
 how life will be.
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coherence cohesion
In order to strengthen the coherence and cohesion of your essay, work on paragraph transitions. Ensure that each paragraph flows smoothly into the next, linking your ideas in a more structured manner.
task achievement
Several grammar and vocabulary inaccuracies are present (e.g., 'more straightness,' 'the smarter,' 'overhim,’ and 'beleived'). Focus on improving grammatical accuracy and word choice to avoid these minor errors.
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Work on providing more detailed and varied examples to support your main points. Examples should directly relate to the arguments you are discussing and further validate your perspective.
task achievement
The essay covers both the advantages and disadvantages of entrance exams thoroughly, which shows a deep understanding of the topic.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are well-constructed and clearly define the scope and purpose of the essay.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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