The bar chart shows the number of visitors to three London Museums between 2007 and 2012.

The bar chart shows the number of visitors to three London Museums between 2007 and 2012.
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The bar chart illustrates the amount of people who visited three London museums over a period of 5 years, from 2007 to 2012.
It is clear that
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the
number
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of visits to the National Gallery
Museum
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experienced a significant rise through the period shown,
however
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, for the Victoria and Albert
Museum
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it was the opposite. From 2007 to 2009, the
number
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of citizens who visited the National Gallery
museum
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rose steadily, from 5.5
million
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visits per
year
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to roughly 8
million
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. In the following
year
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, the
number
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of
visitors
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became 11
million
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per
year
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and remained constant till 2012.
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, in 2012 the
number
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of
visitors
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to the National Gallery
Museum
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reached a peak of 16
million
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annual
visitors
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. The figure for Victoria and Albert
Museum
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started at 14
million
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visitors
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per
year
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in 2007, but it fell to 7
million
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in 2010, and after experiencing some fluctuations, it reached 10
million
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. In 2007, approximately 13
million
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people visited the British
Museum
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,
however
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, from 2008 to 2010, the
number
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of
visitors
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was below 7
million
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people, but after 2010, the figure started to rise and reached 14
million
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visitors
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annually.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, museum, million, year, visitors with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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