The pie charts show the spending habits of citizens in UK in 1971 and 2001. Write a report to a university lecturer describing the data.

The pie charts show the spending habits of citizens in UK in 1971 and 2001. Write a report to a university lecturer describing the data.
The pie charts
describes
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on spending habits of people in
UK
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the UK
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between 1971 and 2001.
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, it is readily visible that the waste
of
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habits of
British
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the British
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significantly changed during the period.
Also
in both
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terms
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term
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they had habits mostly from cars and
foods
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food
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,
while
amount
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the amount
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spent on computers increased in the UK. In 1971 British spent 44% on food which was the highest percentage among the cost categories.The second highest spending in 1971 was on cars, which constituted 22% of all costs. The lowest is on computers only 2%
however
, in 2001
computers
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computer
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users
increase
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to 12%,
it
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means that
time
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period depended on it. Furniture during 2
period
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not even changed. The second pie
charts
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chart
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illustrates
expense
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the expense
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of
portion
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a portion
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of people declined from 6% to 1%,
while
restaurants
to accelerate
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2 times
mors
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more
than
1971
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in 1971
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.The highest amount spent in 2001 by the British was on cars and that consisted
almost
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of almost
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half of the total expenses in
this
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that
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year.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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