The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in household in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selcting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in household in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selcting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graphs indicate the
percentae
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percentage
of households with washing
machine
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machines
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,
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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, and
vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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and the
number
of
hours
of
housework
per household between 1920 and 2019. The
overall
trends show the percentage of electrical
appliances
were
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was
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increasing
by
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over
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time,
while
the
number
of time spent on
housework
were
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was
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declinining
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declining
. In 1920, not even half of the population owned electrical
appliances
,
such
as washing
machine
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machines
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,
refrigetrator
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refrigerators
and
vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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. Only 40% of the households had a washing
machine
in 1920, whilst the
percetange
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percentage
of households who owned
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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and
vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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was smaller
woth
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with
only 30% and 1% respectively.
This
number
kept increasing every year until the
number
of
family
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families
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who had
vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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and
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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in their home reached 100%.
Additionaly
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Additionally
, the amount of
family
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families
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who chose to buy washing
machine
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machines
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was increasing, albeit a smaller rise, with only a 35% increase.
Consequently
, the
number
of
hours
of
housework
per household
were
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was
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dropping significantly. In 1920, people spent 50
hours
per
week
doing their
housework
, like washing clothes, preparing meals, and cleaning.
However
, that
number
dropped to only 10
hours
per
week
in 2019. All-in-all, there was a negative correlation between the ratio of family with electrical
appliances
and the amount of
housework
per
week
between 1920-2019. The ratio of electrical
appliances
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appliance
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ownership kept rising,
while
the
hours
spent
for
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apply
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doing
housework
per
week
kept declining.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words machine, vacuum, number, hours, housework, appliances, week with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • electrical appliances
  • household
  • percentage
  • refrigerator
  • vacuum cleaner
  • washing machine
  • steady increase
  • significant decrease
  • correlation
  • housework
  • number of hours
  • per week
  • period
  • rise
  • reach
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