The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in household in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selcting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in household in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selcting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graphs indicate the
percentae
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percentage
of households with washing
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machine
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machines
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,
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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, and
vacuum
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cleaner
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cleaners
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and the
number
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of
hours
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of
housework
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per household between 1920 and 2019. The
overall
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trends show the percentage of electrical
appliances
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were
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was
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increasing
by
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over
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time,
while
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the
number
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of time spent on
housework
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were
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was
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declinining
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declining
. In 1920, not even half of the population owned electrical
appliances
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,
such
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as washing
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machine
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machines
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,
refrigetrator
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refrigerators
and
vacuum
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cleaner
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cleaners
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. Only 40% of the households had a washing
machine
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in 1920, whilst the
percetange
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percentage
of households who owned
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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and
vacuum
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cleaner
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cleaners
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was smaller
woth
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with
only 30% and 1% respectively.
This
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number
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kept increasing every year until the
number
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of
family
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families
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who had
vacuum
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cleaner
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cleaners
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and
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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in their home reached 100%.
Additionaly
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Additionally
, the amount of
family
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families
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who chose to buy washing
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machine
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machines
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was increasing, albeit a smaller rise, with only a 35% increase.
Consequently
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, the
number
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of
hours
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of
housework
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per household
were
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was
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dropping significantly. In 1920, people spent 50
hours
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per
week
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doing their
housework
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, like washing clothes, preparing meals, and cleaning.
However
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, that
number
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dropped to only 10
hours
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per
week
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in 2019. All-in-all, there was a negative correlation between the ratio of family with electrical
appliances
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and the amount of
housework
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per
week
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between 1920-2019. The ratio of electrical
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appliances
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appliance
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ownership kept rising,
while
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the
hours
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spent
for
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apply
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doing
housework
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per
week
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kept declining.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words machine, vacuum, number, hours, housework, appliances, week with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • electrical appliances
  • household
  • percentage
  • refrigerator
  • vacuum cleaner
  • washing machine
  • steady increase
  • significant decrease
  • correlation
  • housework
  • number of hours
  • per week
  • period
  • rise
  • reach
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