Academic Task 1 The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparision where relevant.

Academic Task 1

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparision where relevant.
The line chart illustrates a comparison in monthly changing
price
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prices
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between
Nickel
,Copper and Zinc in 2014
,.
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,
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The data are
museared
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mustard
in percentages.
overall
, all metals
experianced
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experienced
a
downwared
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downward
trend during the first months.
in
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In
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addition , they all rose
at
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in
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the
lastes
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last
months
on
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of
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the year. The most
sgnificant
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significant
chang
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change
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can be seen in
Nickel
. on the one hand,
Nickel
showes
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showed
a
charp
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sharp
decline to 1% in March and stayed
stabel
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stable
next
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the next
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month.
However
, the rate go
downe dramaticly
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down dramatically
and
reach
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reached
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the
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a
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low point
at
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in
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june
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June
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at -3%.
then
it
go
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goes
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up again and
reminde
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remained
steady next three months at -1%.
In
addition
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addition,
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the figure rose to 2% in November and December.
on the other hand
, the initial percentage of
Nickel
is 2% . It rose to 3% before
decline
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declining
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gradualy
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gradually
to -1% in
june
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June
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.
Whereas
, the percentage stayed stable at around -0.5% before
go
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going
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up and exceeding other metals and being the higher
at the end
of the period. With
regareds
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regard
to
Copper
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Copper,
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it fluctuated between 2% and -1% throughout the given year.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition".
Vocabulary: Replace the words nickel with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "go up" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.

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