In many countries, international tourism has become an important source of income. However, it also has negative effects. Do the benefits of international tourism outweigh the disadvantages?

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, in lots of countries international tourism plays a vital role
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getting
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it is beneficial , it may have some adverse ramifications. In my recony, I advocate that it has more benefits and fewer drawbacks. In the following paragraphs, I will discuss both these sides in
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. On the one hand, it is a positive point for a
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or country that can absorb holiday-makers to their location. Because they can earn lots of
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way. It means that they can solve their
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person is a serious matter that every country
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, they can expand other industries in their home town by
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wealth. UAE is a wonderful instance , as they could prepare not only
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industry
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for their citizens by continuing
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trend.
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, the
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that tourists have spent in destination spots can solve many difficulties in those countries.
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, entering many international tourists may cause some negative points. To illustrate more, after entering
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to a sigh-seeing spot, they create rubbish and some awful things which harm the environment.
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, not only does it take so much time and energy to clean these places but it
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needs much
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, if a
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is addicted to
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industry
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they may not produce with other industries. Thailand is a great sample that attracts millions of tourists during the year. But they experienced an evil time during the breakout of COVID-19 when all the places were banned.
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, it is better that the
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think about some solution to arrange some happenings that may
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after progressing in the tourism
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. In conclusion,
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entering
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may
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some negative points, in my perspective the
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that they spend during their trip can affect all parts of a country. But it is necessary that the
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consider some rules for providing bad effects.
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Good attempt at addressing both the advantages and disadvantages of international tourism.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Revenue
  • Accommodation
  • Cultural exchange
  • Infrastructure
  • Pollution
  • Erosion
  • Overcrowding
  • Economic dependency
  • Global events
  • Sustainable tourism
  • Mutual understanding
  • Strain on natural resources
  • Foot traffic
  • Local traditions and customs
  • Cultural awareness
  • Vulnerable
  • Pandemics
  • Political instability
  • Residue
  • Host country
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