The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.
The tables illustrate the number of how many
Fairtrade-labellled
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Fairtrade-labelled
coffee
and bananas in five European
countries
were sold in 1999 and 2004.
Overall
, the
sales
of
coffee
in all five
countries
increased over the 5 years,
while
Belguim
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Belgium
and
Sweden
had fewer
fairtrade
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in
banans
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bananas
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. Meanwhile, the
sales
of
two
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products saw a most remarkable upward in
UK
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the UK
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. As is shown in
those two table
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,
UK
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the UK
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sold 1.5
millions
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million
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of
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euros
of
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in
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coffee
in 1999,
while
that figure went up to 20
millions
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million
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of
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euros
in 2004, which is highly beyond other
countries
.
Similarly
,
other
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the other
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four
countries
including Switzerland, Denmark, Belgium and
Sweden
had the same rising tendency from 1999 to 2004, but the
increasement
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increase in
of
sales
concerning
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coffee
were
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was
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all under 3
millions
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of
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euros
. As for
banans
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bananas
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,
UK
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the UK
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had the highest
sales
both in 1999 and 2004, with 15
million
euros
and 47
million
euros
respectively. Coincidentally,
sales
of
bannas
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bananas
also
increased in Switzerland (from 1 to 5.5) and Denmark (from 0.6 to 4).
However
,
sales
of
banans
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bananas
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saw a downward in
Belguim
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Belgium
and
Sweden
. In 1999, 1.8
million
euros
of
bananse
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bananas
balance
banana
were sold in Belgium,
while
that figure for 2004 was only 1
million
. As for
Sweden
, it started with 2
million
in 1999
,
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but fell to 0.9
million
in 2004.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fairtrade sales
  • significant growth
  • trends and patterns
  • market expansion
  • sustainable consumption
  • ethical products
  • consumer awareness
  • economic impact
  • percentage increase
  • market share
  • profit margins
  • trade initiatives
  • consumer behavior
  • retail figures
  • economic indicators
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