Many people prefer watch foreign film rather than locally produced films. Why could this be? Should government give more financial support to local movie industries?

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foreign
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and, undoubtedly, governments should take some steps to be widespread among their citizens. To commence with, the media and broadcasting
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, these days, can not be limited to the states’ boundaries.
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thanks to the Internet and online
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, all age
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access to
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news in a few seconds, thereby
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disappearing cultural
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. After that, for people
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keen on other cultures,
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real life and make their
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completely tangible for someone being
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and adults,
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. Making
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and far-fetch imaginary
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encouraged them to watch fiction
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as Stars War.
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, young ladies are usually passionate
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celebrities ‘lifestyles, devastating their moral beliefs.
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, governments are liable to invest in their multimedia industry to preserve national cultures and sometimes their own historical masterpieces. Unfortunately, upcoming and current generations, unwantedly, will
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with cyber environments that are completely different from their ancestors’ lifestyles. The
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future politicians. Some evidence
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future life including war, culture, and regular beliefs will strongly be entwined with broadcasting and cyber environment management.
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people
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everywhere can interact with each other and
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benefit
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their media products.
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task achievement
The essay addresses both parts of the prompt sufficiently, discussing reasons why people prefer foreign films and suggesting that government should support local film industries.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are present and clearly structured, demonstrating a logical flow of ideas.

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