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The maps show Southside , a shopping mall as it is now , and plans for its development. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where revealent . Write at least 150 words

The maps show Southside , a shopping mall as it is now , and plans for its development. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where revealent . Write at least 150 words
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The diagrams above
shows
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show
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 Southside
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mall
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Mall
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 current layout and plans for its redesign.
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, there are many noticeable
differents
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differences
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 in the two maps,
such
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 as the removal of the
park
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, the golf course, and the fitness centre. In lieu of
this
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, the
mall
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's size is enlarged
along with
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 the car
park
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. Inside the
mall
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, fashion stores are added
while
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 other shops
such
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 as the noodle
shop
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 are removed. Looking at the current
mall
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, it could be noted that there is
golf
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a golf
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 course and
park
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 on the eastern side. On the western side and opposite the
entrance
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 resides the car
park
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. Next to
this
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 area is a fitness
center
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. Going into the
mall
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, one is immediately greeted by a cafe, which is situated in front of a play area. The noodle
shop
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 and cinemas are next in line, followed by a department
store
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 at the bottom right corner. The supermarket is located to the right of the
entrance
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. Moving to the development plans, we see that the
mall
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 has experienced an increase in size. As
such
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 there is now space for 3 fashion stores and a bigger department
store
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, with it having its own
entrance
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. Stepping into the original
entrance
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, one will see that the cafe has been replaced by an info
center
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centre
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, and behind it is a beauty salon
instead
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 of a play area. In place of the noodle
shop
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 and cinemas is the shoe
store
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, cosmetics
store
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,
gift
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and gift
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shop
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, followed by another shoe
store
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. Outside the
mall
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, the car
park
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 sits in its original location;
however
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, its size
is
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 almost tripled. It is easily noticeable that the new
mall
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 is built to support more customers and is now specifically designed for business, as seen in the addition of several stores.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words mall, park, shop, entrance, store with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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