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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two line graphs show the number of
hours
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 spent by housewives on housework and the percentage of homes with appliances from 1920 to 2019.
Overall
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, it is noticeable that with a gradual increase in the percentage of electrical house appliances, there was a significant decline in
hours
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 on house
chores
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 that housewives spent during the almost 100-year period. In 1920, housewives spent about 50
hours
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 a
week
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 on housekeeping.
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, by 1940,
this
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time
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 had decreased to 30-40
hours
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 a
week
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. In
such
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 a short period of
time
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, homemakers managed to reduce the
time
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 spent on cleaning by almost 20%. By 1960, the
hours
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 spent on
chores
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 had decreased to 20
hours
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 a
week
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. It is interesting that in the period from 1980 to 2000, the
time
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 for
chores
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 remained virtually unchanged.
This
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 was
due to
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 the fact that during
this
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 era there were no technological changes that could simplify household
chores
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.
However
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, by 2019, technological progress has made a significant step forward and the
time
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 spent on housekeeping has decreased to 10
hours
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 a
week
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. In the future,
this
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time
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 will probably continue to decrease as technology does not stand still and continues to simplify the process of working at home, which makes life much easier for homemakers.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, chores, week, time with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household appliances
  • time-efficient
  • labour-saving devices
  • technological innovations
  • ownership rate
  • housework chores
  • domestic workload
  • automation
  • advancements
  • trend analysis
  • societal shifts
  • economic impact
  • durability
  • lifespan of appliances
  • maintenance
  • historical comparison
  • time allocation
  • drudgery reduction
  • energy consumption
  • disruption in trends
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