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The graph shows the number of people taking part in 4 kinds of sports in a particular European country between 1985 and 2005.

The graph shows the number of people taking part in 4 kinds of sports in a particular European country between 1985 and 2005.
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The line graph compares the four different sports in terms of player numbers in a European country from 1985 to 2005.
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 the number of tennis
players
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 increased gradually, the number of rugby
players
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 decreased slowly. The figures for badminton and basketball
players
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 remained unchanged. In 1985, there were 150 tennis
players
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.
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, it rose slightly to 200
players
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 in 1995 and continued its upward trend to reach its highest level of about 220
players
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 by 2005. Regarding the indicator of rugby
players
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, nearly 250 people played
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 sport in 1985. Afterwards, it declined slowly to 200
players
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 in 1995. After that, it had a sharp drop to hit the lowest point at 50
players
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 in 2005. Turning to basketball
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, there were approximately 80
players
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 in 1985 and levelled off at 80
players
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 by 2005.
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Regarding
 badminton
players
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, it had over 50
players
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 in 1985.
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, it had a considerable decrease to 50
players
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 in 1990. After that, it remained unchanged at 50
players
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 by 2005.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words players with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slowly" was used 2 times.
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