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The maps below show changes that took place at Brighton College between 1970 and 2010.

The maps below show changes that took place at Brighton College between 1970 and 2010.
#maps #show #changes #place #brighton #college
This
 map
show
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shows
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. the
change
 of the place in Brighton College
at
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in
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 1970 and 2010.From these maps, there are some parts which
is
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are
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simillar
Correct your spelling
similar
 from 1970 to 2010, which are Delapore Library and Science Hall. These places stay in the same position from 1970 to 2010.
At
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In
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 1970,
University
 Centre was much
more
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apply
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bigger than
2010
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in 2010
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 and
at
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in
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 2010 there is Dormitory in front of
University
Correct article usage
the University
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 Centre
but
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apply
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at 1970, it was
in
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on
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 down left of the map but it
moves
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moved
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 to
right
Correct article usage
the right
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up at
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in
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 2010,
also
 the buildings
change
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have changed
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 a lot but the roads did not
change
 at all.
During
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In
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 1970, there was
Hall
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a Hall
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 of Medicine but in 2010 there
is
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was
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 none,
however
, there
is
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was
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new
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a new
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 building
call
Wrong verb form
called
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 Granger School of Business and there
is
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was
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 Coffee Shop in front of Granger School of Business.Before the school was call as Brighton College but
at
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in
show examples
 2010 they
change
Wrong verb form
changed
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 the name to Brighton
University
,
also
 at
college
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college,
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 there
was
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were
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 5 buildings but
at
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in
show examples
 2010 there
are
Wrong verb form
were
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 6 buildings in
University
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words change, university with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 4 times.
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