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The maps below show changes that took place at Brighton College between 1970 and 2010.

The maps below show changes that took place at Brighton College between 1970 and 2010.
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Linking Words
 map
show
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shows
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. the
change
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 of the place in Brighton College
at
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in
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 1970 and 2010.From these maps, there are some parts which
is
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are
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simillar
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similar
 from 1970 to 2010, which are Delapore Library and Science Hall. These places stay in the same position from 1970 to 2010.
At
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In
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 1970,
University
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 Centre was much
more
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apply
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bigger than
2010
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in 2010
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 and
at
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in
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 2010 there is Dormitory in front of
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University
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the University
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 Centre
but
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apply
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at 1970, it was
in
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on
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 down left of the map but it
moves
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moved
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 to
right
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the right
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up at
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in
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 2010,
also
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 the buildings
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change
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have changed
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 a lot but the roads did not
change
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 at all.
During
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In
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 1970, there was
Hall
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a Hall
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 of Medicine but in 2010 there
is
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was
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 none,
however
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, there
is
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was
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new
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a new
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 building
call
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called
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 Granger School of Business and there
is
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was
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 Coffee Shop in front of Granger School of Business.Before the school was call as Brighton College but
at
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in
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 2010 they
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change
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changed
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 the name to Brighton
University
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,
also
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 at
college
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college,
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 there
was
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were
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 5 buildings but
at
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in
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 2010 there
are
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were
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 6 buildings in
University
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words change, university with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 4 times.
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