IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 6.5

The line graph shows thefts per thousand vehicles in four countries between 1990 and 1999.

The line graph shows thefts per thousand vehicles in four countries between 1990 and 1999.
#line #thefts #thousand #vehicles #four #countries
The line chart illustrates the number of cars
stealing
Wrong verb form
stolen
show examples
 per thousand vehicles in four different countries during 10 years.
Overall
, it is clear most car
thefts
 occurred in Great Britain over the 10-year period,
although
 there was a slight decrease towards the end. Car
stealing was
Verb problem
theft
show examples
 increased sharply in Sweden
while
 the opposite
of
Change preposition
apply
show examples
it
Correct pronoun usage
apply
show examples
happened in Canada. In France, the number of car
thefts
 remained relatively stable. From 1990 to 1999, most
thefts
 of vehicles were in Great Britain, approximately 18
thefts
 per 1000 vehicles,
then
 peaked at 20 in 1996 before falling dramatically to about 12 in 1999. In
Sweden
Add a comma
Sweden,
show examples
 the act of stealing goes up from about 8 to presumably 13 in a
10 year
Add a hyphen
10-year
show examples
 period. From the starting year till
the
Change the article
apply
show examples
1999,
thefts
Correct article usage
the thefts
show examples
of
Change preposition
in
show examples
 Canada and France remain more or less the same. They started from 6 and 7,
accordingly
.
The
Change preposition
At the
show examples
 end of the
10 year
Add a hyphen
10-year
show examples
 period they would
reached
Change the form of the verb
reach
show examples
 the same level approximately 6.
Submitted by ayshanngurbanova on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Vocabulary: Replace the words thefts with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
▼

Ultimate Speaking practice for IELTS

Practice speaking step by step, answer real-life questions, and build your confidence. Start your free trial and improve your speaking skills today!
What to do next:
Look at other essays:

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.
Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!