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Band 6.5

Many people believe that scientific research should be carried out and controlled by governments rather than private companies. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Many high-education people do not agree about scientific
research
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 being done by our
government
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 rather than an individual company with many people saying the
government
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 can do it better. The writer of the essay completely disagrees with the school of thought and shall seriously explain the motives of
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 ill action. On the one hand, individually financed scientific
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 has done a
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 for innovation because they are freer to do whatever they want and they want to spend their
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 on good actions. Those who do
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 for companies are free to think of whatever want and let their imagination go crazy. If the
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 do not believe them, they cannot do the
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, and
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, lose their
money
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 to other people.
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, companies should be in charge of scientific
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 because of freedom for the scientists who are doing good for society. To the best of my recollection, it is advantageous if
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 do scientific
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 because they can have a
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 of
money
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. Private companies can do wrong the
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 because they can change it to make a
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 of
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 to give in to their greed. On the opposite,
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 conduct
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 to find more solutions to problems
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 as poverty, global warming, diseases and women’s rights. Others
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 as computer machines, human rights and animal rights.
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, the
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’s railway system was chosen because there were fewer accidents on it than the private company’s.
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 shows that
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 are better at scientific
research
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. In conclusion, private
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 can innovate a
lot
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, but
government
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research
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 is meant to be the better option. Scientists will be able to pay more attention to
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research
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 and they can become heroes to save the nation.

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task achievement
Provide clearer support for your arguments with more specific examples.
coherence cohesion
Improve the logical structure by clearly distinguishing between arguments in favor of government control and those against it.
task achievement
The essay presents both sides of the argument, which adds depth to the discussion.
coherence cohesion
A clear introduction and conclusion are present, which helps to frame the essay.

Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • scientific research
  • government oversight
  • ethical guidelines
  • public interest
  • public funding
  • transparency
  • widespread access
  • long-term societal benefits
  • profit motive
  • biased findings
  • restricted research
  • collaboration
  • bureaucratic delays
  • political influence
  • innovation
  • regulations
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