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The bar chart below shows the estimated sales of jeans for two companies next year in Turkey. The pie chart shows the projected market share of the two companies in jeans at the end of next year. Write a short report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The bar chart below shows the estimated sales of jeans for two companies next year in Turkey. The pie chart shows the projected market share of the two companies in jeans at the end of next year. Write a short report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
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The bar
chart
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 illustrates the prediction of
jeans
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 sales for the next year for two Turkish companies.
Also
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, the pie
chart
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 forecasts the percentages of the
market
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share
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 of the two manufacturers of
jeans
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at the end
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 of next year.
Overall
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, it is expected that Jack &
Jones
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 will sell more
jeans
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 than the
Mango
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 company in the next year.
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,
according to
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 the projection of the
share
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market
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, we expect that
Mango
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 and Jack &
Jones
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 companies have half of the shares together.
According to
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 the bar
chart
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,
Mango
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 is expected to sell close to 150
thousand
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 of
jeans
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 pairs in January.
While
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 the figure will remain stable until April, it will rise dramatically to 450
thousand
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 pairs in August.
Then
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, it will not experience any changes until November, and
finally
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, it will reach 600
thousand
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 in December. The figure for Jack &
Jones
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 started at 450
thousand
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 in January and fell to 250
thousand
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 in February, but it is expected to increase steadily to 400
thousand
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 in June. After experiencing some fluctuations, it will reach a new peak of 900
thousand
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 pairs in December. Looking at the pie
chart
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, which shows the percentage of
market
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share
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, we can see that 30% of all
jeans
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market
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share
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 is expected to be for Jack &
jones
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, and 20% for the
Mango
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.
According to
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 the forecast, 50% will be obtained by other vendors.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to, also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, jeans, market, share, jones, mango, thousand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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