Many cities are now turning parks and farmland into new housing developments

Human civilizations have been growing rapidly since the beginning of our era, resulting in the drastic decline of the greens in the cities
due to
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of
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residential
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.
This
led to a controversial issue debating on the topic of whether the conversion of green
area
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to the housing
area
contributed to positive or negative impacts.
However
, after a thorough consideration, though there are some positive effects of the increase of habitat, the negative effects of
this
alteration of the
area
should not be put down by any chance. On one hand, It is undeniable that providing more residential places offers several benefits to humans. One of
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plethora of benefits is that urbanization
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the
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shelter for
human
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, meaning that the increase of residential
area
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will tackle
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the growth of
population
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and
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the chances of
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homelessness.
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, the unprivileged in the cities are more likely to face the obstacle of finding a house
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,
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the habitat for
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could resolve the problems of expanding population in the urban
area
.
Nonetheless
, there are potential drawbacks of the loss of green space which should be taken into account.
On the other hand
, the displacement of the greens in the city's
area
by the place for living could lead to negative impacts
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both
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and humans. For the environment, when there are loss of
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parks and farmland there will be direct effects
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the
air
quality. To demonstrate, photosynthesis by
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plants
are
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one of
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ways to reduce the pollutants in the
air
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human
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, when there are
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plants in the cities with the replacement of towns there will be
construction
which could worsen the surrounding environment from
air
pollution, sound pollution and
the
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waste from the
construction
.
For instance
, the
area
with
construction
often has a high percentage of pollutants in the
air
and high noise from the
construction
sites. In conclusion, it is true that urbanization provides some advantages,
nevertheless
, the disadvantages outweigh the benefits. Leading to the deprivation
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life and environment.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urbanization
  • population growth
  • housing developments
  • natural habitats
  • air quality
  • recreational areas
  • economic benefits
  • local revenue
  • sustainable development
  • environmental preservation
  • displacement
  • congestion
  • public services
  • green rooftops
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