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The table shows the expenditure on various types of food in Italy in 1992, 2002 and 2012.

The table shows the expenditure on various types of food in Italy in 1992, 2002 and 2012.
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The presented table graph illustrates the number of spending on seven different
foodsstuffs
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foodstuffs
foods stuffs
 namely Beef, Chicken, Butter/margarine, Potatoes, Coffee and Milk in Italia over a 20-year
period
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 from 1992 to 2012. Generally, one European country (Italia) spent the most on Beef and Chicken during the same
period
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. It is
also
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 noticeable that expenditure on Butter/margarine and Coffee
were
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 the lowest
throughtout
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throughout
 the
period
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According to
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 the table, spent the most money on Beef at 45
million
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,
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and sigfinicant
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sigfinicant
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significant
 increased to the highest point of 54
million
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 between 1992 and 2012. The figure for Chicken was slightly lower at 38
million
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 in 2010. Italia spent more than the other foodstuffs with expenditure
reach
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 a peak of 56
million
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 in 2012. Between 2010 and 2012, there was a dramatic climb in expenditure on Potatoes from 11 to 18
million
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,
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 the amount spent on milk rose slightly from 13 to only 14
million
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 during the 20-year
period
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.
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, the number of Butter/margarine and Coffee remained almost stable
under
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at under
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 10
million
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 over the
period
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words period, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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