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The key to solving environmental problems is simple: the present generation is to accept a less comfortable life for the sake of the future generation. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is true that environmental problems are
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concerned
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by
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 the public, and some people argue that the present
generation
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 should sacrifice
the
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 comfortable
life
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 for the sake of
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future generations. I completely disagree with
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 opinion.
Firstly
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, asking the present
generation
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 to give up their current lifestyle will lead to social instability. It is hard for the present
generation
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 to change their existing
life
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 patterns, and a sudden change will harm some industries and cause several social issues.
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, lots of plastic factories
close
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 in China because of the restriction
of
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 plastic products, and many employees are fired.
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, the reduction in the comfortable
life
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 of the present
generation
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 is unfair. Everyone should have the right to enjoy their lives, and they do not need to sacrifice their comfort to guarantee the benefit of other groups.
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, solving environmental issues will take generations. The disposal process of some pollutants requires hundreds of years, and it can not be tackled in one
generation
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.
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, the Russian government spends several decades on solving nuclear waste, and three generations in Russia make efforts
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 with
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 issue.
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, the future
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 have better innovative abilities. Compared with older people, it is easier for young people to adapt to the latest technologies and come up with new ideas to protect the environment. In conclusion, it is incorrect to solve environmental issues by simply sacrificing the comfortable
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 of the present
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, and it requires
efforts
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the efforts
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 of everyone.

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coherence cohesion
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coherence cohesion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainable living
  • excessive consumption
  • environmental degradation
  • technological advancements
  • innovation
  • renewable energy
  • sustainable farming
  • waste management
  • policy changes
  • global cooperation
  • balanced approach
  • sacrifice
  • awareness
  • sustainability
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