The graph shows the rates of participation in three different activities in a UK sports club between 1983 and 2003.

The graph shows the rates of participation in three different

activities in a UK sports

 club between 1983 and 2003.
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The line graph illustrates how many UK citizens
who take
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took
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part in swimming
clubs
, team sports
clubs
and gym
clubs
from 1983 to 2003.
Overall
, there was an increase in the proportion of club members in team sports
clubs
and gym activities,
while
the number of people who enjoy swimming saw a downward trend despite its start point being the highest. From 1983 to 1998, there was a slight increase in the rates of members in the team sports
clubs
, from just over 30% to around 40%, after which it experienced a gradual fall to 40% in 2003. Significant growth was witnessed in the percentages of residents who participated in gym
clubs
, from under 10% to 30%, before ending the period at just over 30% As for swimming
clubs
, their
members
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number
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reached a peak of 50% in 1983 and
this
percentage decreased constantly until they accounted for 20% in 2003.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words clubs with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • trend
  • participation rates
  • significant increases/decreases
  • pattern
  • stability
  • growth
  • decline
  • membership
  • comparison
  • socio-economic events
  • historical context
  • period of analysis
  • peak
  • popularity
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