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The pictures below show how tea is produced. They also illustrate the process of making a cup of tea. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

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The process illustrates the production of
tea
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 and making a
cup
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 of
tea
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. In general, there are 15 stages in the whole process of producing
tea
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, beginning with the growth in countries and ending with the consumption.
To begin
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, the
tea
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is grew
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is grown
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 in two countries, namely China and India.
This
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 means that the seeds are sowed by workers.
Then
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, plants grow because of sunshine.
After
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this
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 stage,
tea
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 leaves are picked and put in baskets by people in order to dry. It is followed by packing leaves into boxes. In the next stage, boxes are loaded onto a lorry and delivered to supermarkets. In the supermarkets, the
tea
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 boxes are purchased by customers and taken the
tea
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 home. In
tea
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 home, a
tea
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 bag is put into a
cup
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 and hot water is poured and mixed in the
cup
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. Before adding milk, the mixture is left for two minutes. After that, a
spoon
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spoonful
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 of milk is added to the
tea
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.
Finally
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, the
cup
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 of
tea
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 is ready for drinking.
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coherence cohesion
Try to provide more detailed and clear transition words or phrases to improve the flow from one stage to the next in the process description.
coherence cohesion
Make sure to check for minor grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'grew' instead of 'grown' and 'taken the tea home' instead of 'taking the tea home.'
task achievement
Maintain consistency in tense and structure to enhance readability and coherence.
task achievement
The essay provides a clear process explanation with all the essential steps, ensuring task achievement.
coherence cohesion
The structure is logical and easy to follow, with a good flow from the beginning to the end of the process.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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