Some people think that students who achieve the best academic results should be rewarded. Others believe it is more important to reward students who show improvement. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
It is a popular belief that
students
are better appreciated if they get the highest scores in their studies. Whilst, others have another opinion that the one who able to demonstrate their performance increase should be awarded. This
essay will demonstrate both views which are how top students
keep up their good work because they are appreciated and rewarding the ones who show improvement is causing everyone
to be pushed to improve. Then
the essay will explain why the second opinion is more important than the first belief.
Many believe top students
will continue to work as hard as before when they are recognized for their achievements. Usually, students
tend to think it will be pointless if their hard work is not appreciated. However
, this
view is not strong enough to be taken seriously because they are already rewarded for the high marks they get. For instance
, the top high school students
are able to get into top universities more easily than the others who unfortunately do not have good grades.
On the other hand
, some people think that giving appreciation to students
who show improvement will push everyone
to improve. By this
, I mean not all students
are born talented in academic skills but every single student without exception is able to improve in some way. Considering, that teaching every student to improve is one of the main goals of education, it is more important to encourage everyone
to push themselves rather than only minority students
who are top students
. For example
, in my country, it is a common thing to only appreciate students
who get the highest grades. As a result
, many of them who are not talented to get good marks do not bother to push themselves to improve.
In conclusion, rewarding improvement is more crucially important rather than appreciating raw talent because the top students
have already been rewarded for their good marks and it is one vital mission in education to improve everyone
regardless of their initial background.Submitted by kelly on
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coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion that effectively frame the discussion.
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The writer successfully presents both views of the argument, discussing their merits objectively.
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Relevant examples are provided to support the main points, enhancing the argument.
Your opinion
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