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In some countries, more and more are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

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In many nations,
people
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 are fascinated by their home history and try to find and learn more about it.
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 can be explained because there are reasons behind it. In
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 are concerned about finding out about their houses and some ways to research.
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,
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 are born with different levels of curiosity, but all of them are curious in their own way. "Curiosity" is one of the main reasons why
people
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 try to find out who lives there and what the story is. My parents,
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, had never bought a
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 before they knew about the family and talked with them to understand why they would buy the
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. Another reason, the biggest feeling is fear.
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 are afraid and they want to ensure
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 no problem with the
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 they live in. To make it clear, my mother was always afraid and asked my father to search for the old information because she was thinking about whether there was a crime in the
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 before. How
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 research homes or flats or whatever is something difficult. Perhaps there are many ways to do it
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 as talking with the owner before buying the
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 and asking the lessor for more information to understand everything about the flats. Definitely, there are more ways to research about that. In conclusion, The major reasons are curiosity and fear.
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 can search
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 their own houses by asking the lessor and talking with the owners before they buy a
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. In my opinion, I believe that asking and knowing about where you live and having full information about it is important.
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Try to elaborate more on each point. For example, providing examples or further explanation on why curiosity and fear drive people to find out about their house's history can strengthen your essay.
coherence cohesion
Adding more linking words will help the essay flow smoothly. For example, phrases like 'In addition', 'Moreover', or 'Consequently' can make transitions between paragraphs more seamless.
coherence cohesion
While the essay has a good introduction and conclusion, make sure each body paragraph clearly supports the main points with detailed evidence and examples.
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The introduction sets the stage well by outlining what the essay will address.
introduction conclusion present
The conclusion summarizes the points made effectively and expresses a clear opinion.
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The use of personal anecdotes adds a personal touch and relevance to the essay.

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