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The following table shows the number of people from five European nations living in each other’s countries in 2011.

The following table shows the number of people from five European nations living in each other’s countries in 2011.
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The given table illustrates the figures of
people
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 from five different European nations living in each other’s countries in a certain year.
Overall
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, German
people
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 had the highest number of
people
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 who lived in other countries and
in contrast
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, Polish
people
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 had the least. First and
above all
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, most British
people
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 (550.000) preferred to live in
Poland
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while
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 they had a small number of
people
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 who lived in Spain, at 71.000.
However
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,
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the numbers
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numbers
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number
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 of Germans
people
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 who lived in Italy
were
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was
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 556.000 and just 104.000
people
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 preferred to live in the UK.
Poland
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also
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most
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the most
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 popular country to live in for Italian citizens in 2011
while
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 Spain was the least, at 106.000 and 19.000 respectively.
On the other hand
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, Polish
people
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 who live in other countries had significantly small numbers
compares
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compared
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 to other nations, only 6.000 in 2011.
Additionally
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,
Poland
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 was the most popular country to live
for
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in for
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 British individuals and Italians
while
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 it was the least popular for Spanish
people
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.
Nevertheless
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, Spanish
people
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 mostly prefer
to
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apply
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the UK to live in, at 391.000 and just 86.000
people
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preferred
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prefer
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Poland
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 to live in, in the given year.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 85%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, poland with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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