The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied thay were with their visit, during the same two periods.

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied thay were with their visit, during the same two periods.
The table illustrates how many
people
had
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visited the Ashdown Museum in the years before and after its refurbishments,
whereas
the pie charts demonstrate the rate at which
visitors
were satisfied with their visits.
Overall
, it is evident that after the redevelopment, not only the satisfaction rates but
also
the number of museum attendees went up. In the
year
before the museum was refurbished, it had 74,000
visitors
.
However
,
this
figure surged significantly to more than 90,000
visitors
in the
year
after. Before redevelopment, around half of the
people
visiting were dissatisfied,
while
a mere 15% of them were very satisfied and 30% satisfied. In the
year
after, in comparison,
people
reported more satisfaction, with the majority of them being satisfied and very satisfied at 35% and 40% respectively, accounting for well above 70% of the whole proportion. Dissatisfaction rates,
on the other hand
, dwindled by more than 25%, accounting for 15% of the
visitors
in the
year
after.
Similarly
, very dissatisfied groups
also
sharply declined from 10% to 5%. Notably, the proportion of
people
not responding to the survey remained unchanged at 5%.
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