A friend from abroad is visiting your country next month. She is planning to stay with you, but you can't accomodate her. Write a letter to her - tell her the reasons - Apologise - Make alternative arrangements
Dear Aliya,
It was great to hear from you after a long time! The summers in northern areas of Pakistan are serene and one certainly enjoys the best of all the beauty. Unfortunately, I will not be able to host you at my place on
this
trip as I have renovation going on in my house
.
I am so very sorry for not being able to have you. We are converting the extra room into a study and library for the kids. All the books and paraphernalia are lying across the house
. Sadly, the timeline given by the contractor for work is the same as when you will be here. I am really bummed about that!
I have spoken to a cousin of mine, Zahra and she has agreed to accommodate you at her residence. This
way you will still have the same set-up of staying in a house
as you like. She lives in the same area as me but just in the next lane to ours. We go to each other's house
by walking only. This
will make our late-night chats with chocolates and marshmallows possible as well.
I am excited to see you soon!
Love,
Alizeh.Submitted by hudibaiqbal on
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task achievement
Your letter is engaging and the task is fully completed. To reach a perfect score, try to ensure that every sentence contributes directly to explaining or resolving the situation. This will further enhance clarity.
coherence cohesion
Maintain the strong paragraphing while ensuring all sentences within each paragraph are closely related to the main idea of that paragraph.
task achievement
You effectively addressed all the required points: explaining why you can't accommodate your friend, apologizing, and providing an alternative arrangement.
coherence cohesion
The letter flows logically, with each paragraph focusing on a single idea, making it very easy to follow.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are appropriately warm and friendly, reinforcing the personal connection with the recipient.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite