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Some countries running the house rather than ranking is important for people who might be case it's just a positive or negative development.

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To begin
 with, it's a dream of every youth to claim ownership of the
house
 to live in, it not only provides shelter but
also
 economic stabilities freedom and a sense of livelihood which is not possible in
a
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apply
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rented
homes
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home
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which
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in which
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is
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temporary tenants are forced by
owrner
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owner
 for vacating the room at any time which is stressful for everybody.
In addition
 dream of buying a home not only has a positive impact but
also
negative
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a negative
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,
due to
which
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the high demand, property prices have
sky rocketed
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skyrocketed
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, making low salaries in individuals unlikely to afford a
house
 pushing them homeless or
in
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into
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 a rented
house
, a major concern for authorities
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, for example,
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for example
 data published by you and state that really millions of citizens become homeless and the affordability forces to remain in depression
dueto
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due to
this
 trend,it can be taken as
negative
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a negative
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 development.
To conclude
 it's always a dream for everybody to
to
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claim ownership of
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the
a
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house
 for shelter ,freedom and security which
fail
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fails
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 to happen in a rented home apart from the demand
of
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for
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 the property , very high making it impossible for
lower income
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lower-income
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 people forcing them to
being
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be
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 homeless which can be taken as
negative
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a negative
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 development.
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task achievement
Try to provide a clearer thesis statement in the introduction to guide the reader on what your essay will discuss.
coherence cohesion
Avoid run-on sentences and ensure each sentence has a clear subject and verb to improve readability.
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Include more specific examples to support your points, rather than general statements. For instance, reference specific countries or statistics.
coherence cohesion
Develop paragraphs fully by expanding on points with detail and evidence to improve coherence and cohesion.
task achievement
The essay addresses both the positive and negative aspects of homeownership, showing a balanced viewpoint.
coherence cohesion
The conclusion summarizes the main points discussed in the essay.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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