The graph below shows the average monthly chnages in the prices of three metals during 2014

The graph below shows the average monthly chnages in the prices of three metals during 2014
The line graph describes the monthly percentage changes in prices of
copper
,
nickel
and zinc in the
year
2014.
Overall
, In the first month,
nickel
was the leading
profit
and the least
profit
was zinc but
at the end
of
year
vice versa,
whereas
copper
was the second
profit
in the beginning and remained the same throughout the
year
. The
nickel
proved the highest
profit
6% and the second leading was
copper
2% in the month of January. following that
nickel
showed a sharp surge in the next two months up to 1% which
then
continued to decline till November as lost up from -2% to -3%. In the meantime,
copper
depicts pleated throughout the
year
with a sharp dip in the months of May and June and by the end of
year
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the year
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, both began to gain
profit
of 1% and 1.5% respectively. The least profitable one was Zinc compared to others around 1% which showed a dramatic increase of 3% and
then
gradually decreased over the period but earned a superior
profit
of up to 2% compared to others
at the end
of the
year
.
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