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You are having a graduation party next Saturday night. You have invited 50 people to celebrate at an outdoor barbecue evening, which may continue into late into the night. Write a letter to your elderly neighbour. In your letter: explain what will be happening offer your apologies in advance invite her to join the celebration Begin your letter as follows: Dear Mr / Ms _________ You should write at least 150 words. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

#graduation #party #saturday #night #people #barbecue #neighbour #offer #apologies #advance #celebration #mr #ms #_________ #minutes
Dear Mrs.
dman
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man
 I will write
this
 letter to inform you I will arrange my graduation
party
 next Saturday. Hope you are
good
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well
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, Actually tomorrow I am going to graduate after
my
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apply
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3
year
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years
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hard
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of hard
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 work and patience. Because of that,
Me
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I
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 and my classmate
arrange
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arranged
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 a
party
,
Moreover
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Moreover,
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 we will
doing
Verb problem
have
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outdoor
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an outdoor
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 barbecue and some outdoor
activies
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activities
 and it will
getting
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get
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 over around midnight. So,
In addition
, I will apologise to you because I know you will
getting
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get
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disturb
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disturbed
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.But I will take care of you to finish my
party
 as soon as
and
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possible and
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 will not
create
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make
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 much noise.
Morever
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Moreover
, I will really feel very happy If you
are
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also come
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also
 come
on
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to
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this
party
. I will invite you
for
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to
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 my graduation
party
. thank you your Gursewak
singh
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Singh
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task achievement
Ensure to maintain formal tone throughout the letter and avoid contractions such as 'I'll' and 'you're'. Use 'I will' instead.
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Pay attention to article usage and grammatical structures. For instance, 'I am writing' would be more appropriate than 'I will write'.
coherence cohesion
End the letter with a more formal closing, for example, 'Yours sincerely, Gursewak Singh'.
coherence cohesion
Organize paragraphs so each contains a single idea. For example, separate the paragraph apologizing for the disturbance from the paragraph inviting the neighbor to join the party.
coherence cohesion
Ensure logical flow between sentences by using connectors and transition words more effectively, such as 'Additionally', 'Furthermore', etc.
task achievement
The letter covers all the necessary information: the event, an apology, and an invitation.
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The tone is polite and considerate, which is suitable for the context of addressing an elderly neighbor.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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