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The graph shows data on the manufacture of passenger cars in 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows data on the manufacture of passenger cars in 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart depicts the data regarding the
production
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 of
passenger
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 cars in 2015. In 2015, Greater China and Europe dominated the percentage of world
passenger
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car
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production
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 at 26% and 25%, respectively.
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 is followed by North America and Japan or Korea at 19% and 16%, which number became the second highest in
passenger
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car
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production
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.
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, in comparison with the other
countries
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, there were 3
countries
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 whose contributions were not too significant. South Asia, South America, and the Middle East or Africa only produced below 10% of the total
passenger
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 cars manufactured in a row. Clearly,
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 data showed insignificant growth in
car
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production
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 in those 3
countries
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 in 2015. In conclusion, among the seven
countries
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, Greater China and Europe became the leading
countries
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 that produced
passenger
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 cars in 2015.
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 side, South Asia, South America, and the Middle East or Africa were the least contributors to
car
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 manufacturing.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, passenger, car, countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "data" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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