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Informal Letter Prompt: "You’ve just returned from a holiday and want to share your experiences with a friend. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, you should: 1.Describe where you went and what you did. 2.Explain why you enjoyed the holiday. 3.Invite your friend to join you on your next holiday."

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Dear Shally, I hope you are doing well. I am thrilled to tell you about my recent trip to Dharamshala. It was an amazing experience to be in the city of Dalai Lama, the famous Buddhist monk. We went to the temple and school made by him which is situated downhill from the main city. It was so peaceful there and a lot of
fengshui
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 elements can be seen, remember the ones we used to study during our course? The holiday was so rejuvenating and brought peace to my inner mind. The trek to Triund peak was an eye opener to the fact
that
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how beautiful
this
 world is but we being trapped in our hectic work life
forgets
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 about it. I would really recommend that you should visit the city once in your life.
Also
, let’s plan a holiday together to Kashmir. I was thinking
to visit
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of visiting
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 there
last
 month but could not do so
due to
 my work schedule. In the coming month, there is a long weekend in which we can plan a short trip. Do let me your thoughts about it. Waiting to see you soon and do plan a vacation to Dharamshala. You will
definately
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definitely
 love it. Love Bindiya
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coherence cohesion
Try to focus each paragraph around a single central idea to improve clarity and coherence.
task achievement
Be careful with minor grammatical errors such as subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'forgets' should be 'forget').
task achievement
Provides a detailed and complete response, addressing all parts of the prompt effectively.
task achievement
Maintains a friendly and informal tone, which is appropriate for the task.
coherence cohesion
Uses greeting and closing effectively to frame the letter.
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