Nowadays countries are reducing the cost of air travel as compared to the past. While some argue this will result in a negative outcome, others believe it will be positive. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Use relevant examples.

It must be acknowledged that the flight ticket price has been dropping ever since the end of COVID days.
Such
reduction
sparked conflicts upon the consequence of
such
reduction
in
cost
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the cost
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of flight.
This
essay is going to explain the pros and cons of the
reduction
and share my
piece of thought
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thoughts
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on the issue. Some believe that the
reduction
of flight
ticket
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tickets
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is beneficial for cultural exchange among
countries
. The
reduction
of
travel
cost
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costs
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stimulates tourism. The local citizens can venture out to other
countries
and
therefore
gaining
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gain
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the
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first-hand experience
on
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culture
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the culture
a culture
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of other
countries
.
This
cultural exchange sparks mutual respect between the
residence
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residents
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of different
countries
.
However
, another area to be looked into is the pollution associated with the
increase
in
the
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air
travel
. The
plane
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exhausts contain
air
pollutant
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pollutants
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including
green house
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greenhouse
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gases. The
increase
in
air
travel
may result in the
increase
in the emission of
green house
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greenhouse
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gases
and
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thus
intensifying global warming. There is little
disput
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doubt
that the
reduction
on
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in
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the cost of
air
travel
is beneficial to the thriving cultural diversity.
However
, I believe
such
reduction
does more
harms
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harm
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than
goods
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good
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to
the
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human kind
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humankind
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. Apart from the
air
pollution, the staggering number of
tourist
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tourists
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may provoke over-tourism and
therefore
destory
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destroy
local culture. The increasing number of visitors caused many
problem
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problems
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,
such
as cultural conflicts and pollution. In conclusion, the
increase
in
the
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air
transportation is a
double edged
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sword, it brings a lot of
benefit
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benefits
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but meanwhile
causing
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causes
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many
long term
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harms that cannot be ignored.
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task response
To enhance task response, include more specific examples and evidence to support your points. For example, mention specific countries or statistics related to tourism growth or emissions due to air travel.
coherence cohesion
In coherence and cohesion, ensure that your sentences link smoothly. Some transitions can be clearer. For instance, phrases like 'On the other hand' or 'Conversely' can be used to introduce contrasting points.
coherence cohesion
The essay's structure is clear, with a well-defined introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion.
coherence cohesion
The main points are logically organized and relevant to the topic.
task response
The essay addresses both views and provides a clear opinion, fulfilling the task requirement adequately.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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