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The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The maps given compare the Ryemouth village’s development from 1995 to
present
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the present
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 moment.
Overall
, it can be seen that many features in the prior year
has
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 been changed into new features or even demolished.
To begin
 with, regarding
with
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the south
area
 of the maps, there are many changes
has
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 occurred, the five buildings on the west side that used to be shops
has
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 turned into restaurants. Move to the opposite side of the shops, there are fish markets that
has
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 transformed into apartments.
Additionally
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 there was a fishing port
on
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in
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 the south of the villages,
apparently
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 it has been demolished
along with
 the fish markets transformation.
Moreover
, the hotel and the cafe
are
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remain the same, except a car park has been added next to the hotel. Moving to the north
area
 of the maps, it is obvious that the pathways
has
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have
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 been expanded to the west
area
 to facilitate the development of the new houses
on
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in
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 the
area
. To the east, we no longer find the forest park with trees there, which
has
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have
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 been chopped down to make
a
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space for
tennis
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a tennis
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area
 next to
golf
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the golf
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area
 that used to be
a
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farmland before.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • development
  • village
  • Ryemouth
  • 1995
  • present
  • houses
  • small school
  • residential areas
  • amenities
  • population
  • increased
  • growth
  • expansion
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