The charts below show the main methods of transportation for people of one university for work or study in 2004 and 2009. Summarize the information by selecting the main features and comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the main methods of

transportation for people of one university for work or study in 2004 and 2009.

Summarize the information by selecting the main features and comparisons where relevant.
The charts describe the proportion
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transportations
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transportation
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types which were used by people for working or studying in a university in 2004 and 2009. The most significant
facts
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to emerge from
these graph
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are
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that all methods of transport showed an upward
users
except
car
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cars
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which experienced a downward trend. Another interesting point is that
bus
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and
car
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were the
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transport that was used in both periods. Looking at the details, the number of bus and car
users
had the biggest portion than other transports. These stood at 33% and 51% in the first period
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bus passengers rose gradually
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13% in 2009 but people who used cars dropped dramatically with twice reduction to 26 % in 2009.
On the other hand
, the walking and train
users
were not as high as bicycle passengers who had almost 10% compared to walking and train transport had just under 5% in 2004
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these transportations got rising the
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maximum
around 2% in 2009.
Whereas
bicycle
users
increased about 16% in 2009.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words users with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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