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You recently took an online personality assessment test. Write a letter to a friend describing the results of the test and how it relates to your behavior and daily life.

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Dear Sara, I hope you are doing well and enjoying your time. I am keen to tell you about a personality
test
 that I
have taken
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 online
couple
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a couple
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 of days ago. The result of the
test
 was somehow surprising and it was far from my expectation. It had some contrasting items;
for example
, having selfish steak vs. putting others first in some cases. I am wondering
that
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how
can
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it
be
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 possible?! I think the
test
 bears some bugs. There was an item that made me think, being brutally honest, my sister had told me about
this
 one earlier but I didn’t take it
serious
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. I think I have to work
on
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such
manner
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a manner
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otherwise
 I will hurt people’s
emotion
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 and they will be mad
of
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 me. I suggest you take some
test
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 to analyze your character; it can be helpful for your
communications
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communication
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 and relationships with your friends and family. Eagerly waiting for your feedback Cheers Ghazale
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coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single clear idea to improve coherence.
coherence cohesion
Avoid repeating similar points and try to maintain consistency in your ideas.
coherence cohesion
The letter is generally well-structured and covers relevant points of interest.
task achievement
Your tone is friendly and suitable for a letter to a friend.
task achievement
You have addressed the topic well and provided detailed personal reflections.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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