You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect. Write a letter to the editor of t he magazine. In you letter •Correct the information in the acritical •Explain whey its is important for the magazine to vie the correct information •Suggest what the magazine should do about this situation.

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Dear Sir/Madam, I hope you are doing great. I am writing to draw your attention to the latest article published

last

week in your international travel magazine related to incorrect information about my hometown. First of all, I really appreciate the way you provide knowledge about various cities of our country to the society.

However

, I read a piece of writing yesterday about my town's history that was very disappointing. You mentioned that the entrance of the city was recently built under a new government project. Here, I would like to tell you that it was built 300 years ago by the Sikh Empire and it was settled by them. Apart from that, our city has four doors in each direction which is

also

a symbol of equality.

Moreover

, You can collect interesting facts related to the city from the reference books in the old library. It is a historic town that has the potential to attract more readers with its captivating stories. I would be most grateful if you could visit my hometown for a short period and give us a chance to show around us. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours sincerely, Tajinder Singh

Submitted by tajinder.panag on Mon Jan 08 2024

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task achievement

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coherence cohesion

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

198 words

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reputation
journalism
rectify
inaugurate
collaboration
accurate/inaccurate information
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local businesses
tourism
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correction
misinformation
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