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The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian coountries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian coountries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.
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The line chart depicts the change in the proportion of citizens with different nationalities, being
Philippinos
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Filipinos
, Malaysians, Thais, and
Indonesian
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Indonesians
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, living in cities from the year
of
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apply
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1970 to 2020 and the projection of
population
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 from 2020 to 2040.
Overall
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, all nationalities increased in proportion from 1970 to 2040, with
Philippinos
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Philippines
 being the major
population
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. From the year from 1970 to 2020, the percentage of Malaysians rose drastically from one-third of the
population
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 in 1970 to over
two-third
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two-thirds
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 of the
population
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 in 2020.
While
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 Philipinos rose
sginificantly
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significantly
 from one-third of the
population
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 in 1970 to almost half of the
population
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, shortly replaced
Malaysian
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Malaysia
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 as the most populated
nations
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nation
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 in the cities. It
then
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 suffered a drop to nearly 40% of the
population
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 in 2020. Other nationalities,
such
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 as Thais and Indonesian
also
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 witnessed an increase from below
one-fifith
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one-fifth
 of the
population
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 in 1970 to over one-third of the
population
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. In the projected
population
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 demographic from 2020 to 2040, the percentage of
Malaysian
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Malaysians
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 is expected to rise continuously but
in
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at
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 a slower rate to nearly 80% of the
poulation
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population
. The rest of the nations have
rougly
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roughly
 half of the total
population
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 living in the cities.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urbanization
  • population
  • percentage
  • trend
  • growth
  • stagnation
  • prediction
  • projection
  • rapid
  • gradual
  • significant
  • factors
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