some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. why is this the case? do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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sign if it is followed by increasing parent wisdom.

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should be balanced with people’s wisdom.

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need to update their ability to nurture their kids which

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on how to deal with contemporary parental methodology,

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will no longer be a

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could reduce the eye function. The fast movement of the videos or pictures on the

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and become addictive.

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more beneficial

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the growth of

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as long as it is followed by the knowledge of the

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to update their parental nurture.

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still need to make guidance and regulation on the

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to prevent health

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