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The maps below show the changes in the art gallery ground floor in 2005 and the present day. Summarize the information by selecting the main features, and make comparisons.

The maps below show the changes in the art gallery ground floor in 2005 and the present day. Summarize the information by selecting the main features, and make comparisons.
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The provided map indicates some modifications in the
art
gallery
 which is located
in
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 the ground floor in 2005 and the present day. A glance at the map reveals
thatthe
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that the
 whole
area
 has experienced a lot of various changes and
also
 construction from 2005 to now. There were three
Exhibition
 rooms (1,2,3) beside together which have remained unchanged from 2005 to the present day.
Moreover
,there used to be a receptionist desk next to the
Gallery
 office which has been moved to the
center
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 of the
area
 near the Temporary
exhibition
.Another notable change is the construction of the lift beside the Stairs in the north of the region.
Also
,there did not use to be
a
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Entrence
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Entrance
 Hall after the
Entrence
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entrance
 door in the
art
gallery
 in 2005,
However
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 the government has produced an
Entrence
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Entrance
 Hall in front of the
receptionist
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area
 recently.
In
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It
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 is interesting to note that another striking change is the transformation of the Cafe into the
Gallery
 shop next to the Stairs in the northwest of the place.
In addition
,there used to be a
Gallery
 office between
Cafe
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the Cafe
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 and
Exhibition
rooms
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Room
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 4 which has been replaced by
Vending
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a Vending
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 machine in recent days.
Additionally
,another interesting development is the conversion of
the
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Exhibition
rooms
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Room
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 4
to
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into
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Temporary
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a Temporary
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exhibition
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 and Children's
area
 in the west of the
art
gallery
.
Also
,there did not use to be a ramp for
wheel
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a wheel
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chair
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chairs
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 in
art
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an art
the art
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gallery
 in 2005,Whilst the government has built it near the
Entrence
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Entrance
 recently.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words art, gallery, area, exhibition, entrence with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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