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In some countries, more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this question?

#countries #people #history #house #research
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 discovery
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historical
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residence or construction they live in. In
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 my opinion in the upcoming paragraph. To commence with, history plays a crucial role in our lives. A very important point to consider
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 individuals want to figure out if the place is worth investing in.
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attracting a lot of people’s attention and them to better understand the historical value of the place. To
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 point, I would like to mention that the
acient
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ancient
 Tan Ky house in Hoi An is 200 years old, built thickness of history. Another point I would like to make
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 that we have a background in the population and culture that we live in.
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 the fact that they will have a deep understanding
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 for the town where we are living as well. As for ways of finding the information, there are
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 a number of options to learn about a building. First of all, of course, it is the Internet. People have the possibility to find most of
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.
Second,
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 the locals about
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the information
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 they wish to want. A good example of people
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 the habit of
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visiting
visting
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visiting
 the neighbourhood areas to buy a house and examination In conclusion,
this
 phenomenon is contributed from different perspectives, including personal interest and living purpose.
Also
, they create benefits for individuals and the city
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The essay shows an understanding of why people might be interested in the history of their homes and buildings.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Historical research
  • Genealogy
  • Architectural styles
  • Heritage
  • Relics
  • Oral history
  • Archival records
  • Museum exhibits
  • Historical societies
  • House tours
  • Renovation projects
  • Original blueprints
  • Careful documentation
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