In some parts of the world traditional festivals and celebrations have disappeared or are disappearing. What problems is this causing? What measures could be taken to counter this situation?

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Traditional

festivals

and

celebratios

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celebrations

show the country's

culture

. In the

deveploed

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developed

world, people are forgetting their traditional functions and

celebrations

that

was

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were

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celebetared

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celebrated

years back. So let us discuss what are the problems causing and the measures to be taken to counter

this

situation. In

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ancient

days

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days,

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use

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used

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to have various

festivals

and

celebrations

which

was

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were

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celebrated by our grandparents, but

later

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in later

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days in some countries

lot

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a lot

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of young

genetrations

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generations

generation

are forgeting

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forget

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thier

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their

traditions and

culture

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is because

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not all

the

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apply

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parents are

intrested

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interested

to teach

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in teaching

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their traditions to

the

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their

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childern

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children

, and

other

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another

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main reason is

the

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that

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Gen

Z's

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are working far from their native place or from their

family

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families

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earm

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earn

money. If

this

continues like

this

there will not be any

festivals

celebrations

for our future generations.

Firstly

this

problem can be solved by staying with our family and having spend time with our loved ones, or we can solve

this

atleast

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at least

by teaching the tradition to our

childern

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children

Secondly

, we can

creat

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create

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apply

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social media

awarness

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awareness

and

sharing

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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5

5.5

Logical structure

6.5

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

5.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

231 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

traditional festivals
heritage
cultural identity
folklore
cultural tourism
intergenerational
homogenization
commercialization
intangible cultural heritage
community engagement
awareness
revitalize
cultural diversity
educational programs
governmental support
logistical support

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In some parts of the world traditional festivals and celebrations have disappeared or are disappearing. What problems is this causing? What measures could be taken to counter this situation?

Fully explain your ideas

Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

The majority of news being reported is bad news. Why do you think this is? Should bad news be banned?

Today many people buy imported food, rather than consuming local products. Do advantages outweigh disadvantages?

There is a lot of pressure and stress in many people's lives. What are the causes of this problem? What could be done to reduce it?

Governments give lots of support to artists, even though some people think it is a waste of money that could have been spent better elsewhere. Discuss both views and give your opinions.