task one: The charts below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today.

task one: The charts below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today.
The maps illustrate the modifications that have been
taken
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place in a harbour since 2000.
Overall
, it is evident that there are more facilities and docks than in 2000. Notably, unlike
2000
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, now people are provided with decent accommodation, offering both
convenient
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and accessibility for visitors and
staffs
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Entering from
Main
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road, the car park and showers and toilets on the left, have
been
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remained in the same location. The carpark in front of them,
however
, is now accompanied
with
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an additional room for showers and toilets. To the east of
this
area, there used to be a site dedicated to fishing boats, which now is now replaced with an area for private
yaghts
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yachts
. Previously, private
yaghts
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yachts
were placed just to the north of fishing boats. Moving on to passenger ferries, the number of docs has
saw
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an increment from one to two in 2000 and at present respectively, meaning more
yaghts
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yachts
can be launched at a time.
In addition
, at the
southerneast
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southernmost
southern east
of the map, there is an island, which previously accommodated a lifeboat
and
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, a castle and a private beach. At the moment,
while
the lifeboat and private beach stayed unchanged, the castle's been demolished, giving place to a new hotel.
Lastly
, some cafes and shops have been introduced on the west side of the lifeboat.
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