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In many countries, people are choosing to get married later in life. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this and give your opinion?

In many nations,
people
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 want to get married later in their lives. I believe
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 there are some benefits,
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 as they can focus on their career, and can have a mature relationship, and there are some drawbacks, like there can be pressure from family, and
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people
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 can have issues with having children. On the one hand, if
people
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 get married later can give them more time to pursue their dreams or goals, which is a very crucial part of life.
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, it will ultimately lead to becoming wealthy and getting a perfect life partner.
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, getting married late can lead to a more mature person in life, where both will be mature enough to face and overcome any issues.
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, in Kenya,
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 in their country deliberately delay marriage because they want to pursue their careers.
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,
people
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 from many countries get married later, which can lead to family pressure. Generally, families want their children to get married at the correct
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, and parents want to see their grandchildren play around.
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, it has a major concern about not having a child. It happens in some cases where
people
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 get married after the
age
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 of 35, and it is a minimum
age
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 limit, which is proven by scientists.
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, my childhood friend who got married at the
age
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 of 37, and he does not have any children to
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 day. In conclusion, there are both advantages and disadvantages, but
people
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 should know the limits
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 they should marry or achieve a goal.

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Make sure your arguments are well organized and clearly connected. Each point should flow naturally into the next.
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Try to provide more detailed examples for each point to better support your arguments.
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Consider elaborating on your conclusions to strengthen your overall argument.
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You presented both advantages and disadvantages nicely, showing a good understanding of the topic.
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Your introduction clearly states your belief about the topic, which is important for the reader.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • marriage
  • advantage
  • disadvantage
  • personal growth
  • education
  • career
  • financial stability
  • mature
  • relationships
  • conflicts
  • couples
  • compatible
  • pressure
  • society
  • family
  • health issues
  • children
  • emotional stress
  • loneliness
  • isolation
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