task one: The charts below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today.
The maps illustrate the modifications that have been
taken
place in a harbour since 2000.
Wrong verb form
taking
Overall
, it is evident that there are more facilities and docks than in 2000. Notably, unlike 2000
, now people are provided with decent accommodation, offering both Change preposition
in 2000
convenient
and accessibility for visitors and Replace the word
convenience
staffs
Entering from Fix the agreement mistake
staff
Main
road, the car park and showers and toilets on the left, have Change the article
the Main
been
remained in the same location. The carpark in front of them, Unnecessary verb
apply
however
, is now accompanied with
an additional room for showers and toilets. To the east of Change preposition
by
this
area, there used to be a site dedicated to fishing boats, which now is now replaced with an area for private yaghts
. Previously, private Correct your spelling
yachts
yaghts
were placed just to the north of fishing boats.
Moving on to passenger ferries, the number of docs has Correct your spelling
yachts
saw
an increment from one to two in 2000 and at present respectively, meaning more Change the verb form
seen
yaghts
can be launched at a time. Correct your spelling
yachts
In addition
, at the southerneast
of the map, there is an island, which previously accommodated a lifeboatCorrect your spelling
southernmost
southern east
and
, a castle and a private beach. At the moment, Correct word choice
apply
while
the lifeboat and private beach stayed unchanged, the castle's been demolished, giving place to a new hotel. Lastly
, some cafes and shops have been introduced on the west side of the lifeboat.Submitted by bita.rezaei7052 on
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