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You were sent by your company to attend a meeting in another country, but you are not happy with the hotel your organizer booked for you. Write a letter to an organizer about the meeting details What you did not like about the hotel what you want organizer to do about it?

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Dear Mr. Brown, I am writing
this
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 letter to express my gratitude for arranging the meeting in Melbourne, Australia. The meeting will be held at the company's headquarters on Wednesday
that is
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 10th July 2024. It will help me with the knowledge and understanding of the trading system. I regret to inform you that I am not satisfied with the amenities provided by the hotel you have booked for me. As the air conditioning system is very noisy.
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 I could not get sound sleep.
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, the internet was faulty too.
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, the staff was very courteous. I request you to kindly take action against
this
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 issue immediately and make better arrangements in
other hotel
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another hotel
other hotels
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 which has to be
nearby
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near
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 the meeting centre.
Furthermore
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, you should book
five star
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five-star
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 hotels for
such
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 important reasons. I look forward
for
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to
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positive
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a positive
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 response. Thank you for your time and consideration. Yours sincerely, Karanveer Singh

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task achievement
While the letter covers all required points, it would be beneficial to provide specific examples to emphasize the issues you experienced at the hotel.
coherence cohesion
Ensure smooth transitions between points to enhance readability. For example, using phrases like 'Additionally,' or 'Furthermore,' can help link ideas more effectively.
coherence cohesion
Consider revising sentences where minor grammatical errors occur. Although this does not significantly impact your overall score, it can contribute to clarity and polish.
task achievement
The letter maintains a polite and professional tone throughout, appropriate for a formal complaint.
coherence cohesion
The structure of the letter is clear, with a logical progression from the introduction to the description of issues and the proposed solution.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph presents a single idea, making it easy to follow the main points of the complaint.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • gratitude
  • arrange/arrangement
  • specifics
  • cleanliness
  • amenities
  • service
  • location
  • improve
  • solution
  • alternative
  • accommodation
  • recommendation
  • organize/organizer
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