The chart below shows the results of a survey about peoples coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about peoples coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart depicts the number of
people
in five Australian cities about the habits of buying
coffee
and
tea
. In
the
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summary,
the
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most
people
choosed
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chose
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coffee
or
tea
in Melbourne with Hobart in the second city
the
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last
4
weeks
. Different for the fresh
coffee
buying habits in 4
weeks
saw that the Brisbane and Adelaide have
the
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similar percentage. Based on the chart, between the consumption of instant
coffee
in the
last
4
weeks
and
coffee
or
tea
in the
last
4
weeks
category
that
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people
in Adelaide have
similar
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a similar
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percentage which is 50% of
people
drink instant
coffee
and 49% drink
coffee
or
tea
in the
last
4
weeks
. The lowest city which drank
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fresh
coffee
in the
last
4
weeks
is Brisbane around 33
percent
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per cent
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and followed
with
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by
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Adelaide around 34
percent
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per cent
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.
The most
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people
in Melbourne drink
the
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coffee
or
tea
with
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around 63%.
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