Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discussion both these views and give your own opinions.
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others argue that it would have negative impacts on the other measurable factors of health.I partially agree with these statements and discuss
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club,huge ground one can use it for their leisure time activity like clubbing and playing with their friends.
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The introduction needs to clearly and completely state the main points you will discuss. Try to concisely address both views and state your opinion clearly. For example: 'Some people believe that increasing the number of sports facilities is the best way to improve public health. Others argue that this approach is insufficient and other measures are needed. This essay will discuss both viewpoints and provide my own perspective.'
clear comprehensive ideas
Your ideas are not fully developed. Try to expand on why sports facilities improve public health and why some believe they are insufficient. For example, you could discuss how sports facilities promote physical activity, which is essential for maintaining a healthy weight and reducing the risk of chronic diseases. On the other hand, you could discuss that other measures such as education about nutrition and healthcare accessibility are also necessary for a holistic approach to public health.
relevant specific examples
Provide specific examples to support your points. For example, mention a city that has successfully improved public health by increasing sports facilities or how educational programs on nutrition have had a positive impact.
logical structure
The essay should follow a logical structure. Make sure your paragraphs have clear topic sentences and that the ideas flow smoothly from one to the next. Use transition phrases like 'Firstly,' 'In addition,' 'On the other hand,' and 'In conclusion' to guide the reader.
introduction/conclusion present
Include a proper conclusion to summarize your points and restate your opinion. For example: 'In conclusion, while increasing the number of sports facilities can play a role in improving public health, it is also important to implement other measures such as public health education and improving access to medical care.'
logical structure
Connect the ideas within and between paragraphs effectively using cohesive devices. For example, 'Furthermore,' 'However,' 'In contrast,' etc.
task achievement
The essay addresses the task by discussing both views about public health.
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The topic is relevant and important for public health discussions.
Include an introduction and conclusion
A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.
The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.
The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:
Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation
Example:
To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported.After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.
Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:
Hope you are well. I placed an order for a remote-controlled truck for my teenage son a few days back which was delivered yesterday, August 21st. The truck and its remote both use rechargeable lithium-ion batteries. Additionally, a user manual with instructions on operating the toy was provided in the package. Per the description on your website, the toy also has a 1-year warranty from the date of purchase.
Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. In this essay, I will explain the reasons why I firmly disagree with this remedy, as there are superior alternative solutions: congestion pricing and car-sharing and carpooling programs.
I hope you are doing well. I want to tell you something finally, I got a student visa and coming there so I am writing you this letter to help me regards the part-time job in Melbourne, Australia.
In our contemporary society, some communities have a notion that the governments squander their national budget on space exploration and they believe that money can be spent on more beneficial things for the nations. In the forthcoming paragraphs, this essay will elucidate the reasons why I cannot wholeheartedly concur with this idea and provide a logical conclusion from my standpoint.
I know that you have decided to join the camping group to spend your summer vacation and you asked my opinion about that. You know that I went camping a couple of times and, to be honest, I should say that it was really enjoyable. But don’t forget to consider some points while choosing the group that you are going with. The one that I joined, had a really supportive leader and she was constantly checking everything from the status of our accommodation to the places that we wanted to go to. Also, she was really sensitive about choosing the people who were joining the team as she believed that good accompanies can make a camping memory memorable or horrible, and I should say that I totally agree with her. Everything was absolutely nice except not having a toilet which was kind of torturing for me as well as sleeping outside that I couldn’t feel safe with. Considering all these points, I still tend to attend another camping as the negative points could not stop me from enjoying the mom...