An increasing number of people do not know their neighbors, and there is no longer a sense of community. What do you think are the causes of this situation? Can you suggest some solutions?
In today's era , the number of
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the individual
an individual
individual
who Change to a plural noun
individuals
do
not know their Change the verb form
does
surrrounding
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surrounding
surroundings
people
is increasing day by day and their
is no longer Replace the word
there
sense
of community between them . The main causes of Correct article usage
a sense
this
problem
can be the busy schedule of masses
and Correct article usage
the masses
mobile
era . The solutions related Correct article usage
the mobile
this
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to this
problem
will be defined in brief in upcoming paragraphs .
Why , there is an increment in the numberChange preposition
of
people
who do not know their neighbours? The underlying reason behind this
issue is hectic
schedule . because , in Add an article
a hectic
this
fast paced
world individuals Add a hyphen
fast-paced
are
not only have work related to their studies but Unnecessary verb
apply
also
work places
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workplaces
along with
their household chores . So, in this
way
they do not even have Add a comma
way,
a
sufficient Correct article usage
apply
time
for their fun activities . Apart from that, due to
advancement
in technological Fix the agreement mistake
advancements
system
, Fix the agreement mistake
systems
mostly
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most
people
give more preference to spend their time
with their mobile and laptop inside their home
rather than going outside to Fix the agreement mistake
homes
talking
with the neighbourhood . Wrong verb form
talk
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:- Various studies conducted in the USA revealed that the maximum users of cell phones is
increased Verb problem
has
form
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from
last
3 to 4 years Correct article usage
the last
especially
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, especially
the
children and youngsters . They are not taking any interest Correct article usage
apply
spending
their Change preposition
in spending
time
outside their home . Hence
, above mentioned factors explain the reasons of
no longer Change preposition
for
sense
of community among Correct article usage
a sense
the
individuals these days .
There are Correct article usage
apply
number
of ways by which Change the article
a number
the number
a better relationships
can be developed among the surrounding Correct the article-noun agreement
better relationships
a better relationship
people
. If, elder people
of town
should organise some fun activities Add an article
the town
such
as games for children along with
music competition for adults as well as
elderly collectively and they should invite all those people
who is
living nearby . In Change the verb form
are
this
way , they can enjoy their precious time
together and try to understand each other . Apart from that , government
should Add an article
the government
also
enhance these types of activities by organising some events centre of the towns . So , everyone can take part easily . Thus
, these are the some
solutions Correct quantifier usage
apply
that
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apply
mention
above can solve the Wrong verb form
mentioned
problem
of lack of interaction between the neighbours .
In conclusion , Although
due to
the hectic schedule and development in
electronic gadgets Change preposition
of
people
are not taking interest
in their surroundings , Correct article usage
an interest
this
problem
can be solved by arranging functions in the common area of the neighbourhood and inviting all them
.Change preposition
of them
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