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The graph and chart below give information on the average daily maximum and minimum temperatures in degrees Celsius (°C) and the average number of days with rainfall each month for two Australian cities.

The graph and chart below give information on the average daily maximum and minimum temperatures in degrees Celsius (°C) and the average number of days with rainfall each month for two Australian cities.
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The line graph and diagram
compares
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 the amount of information about data on the typical highest and lowest temperatures recorded daily in degrees Celsius (°C),
as well as
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 the average monthly rainfall days, for two cities in Australia.
Overall
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, during
this
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one year
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 period, the highest temperature was in February with 30 degrees in Brisbane, with all eleven other
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months
 much less on them.
In
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 June to July
shown
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the lowest index
degreased
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decreased
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 top the near by 0
degree
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. It can be seen from the diagram that
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decreased
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 only in
summer
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the summer
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 months.
However
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 by
Brisband
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Brisbane
 maximum there
is
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it
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 goes evenly and has not decreased much compared to others. The gap in spending between
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this
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 two cities has widened and considerably more temperate was in other seasons. It is interesting to note from the second chart that
the
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in Brisbane
also
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 the statistics of rainfall decreased in
summer
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the summer
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monthes
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months
, in Canberra only in hot seasons much more than
other
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in other
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 periods.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average daily maximum
  • average daily minimum
  • rainfall
  • degrees Celsius (°C)
  • anomalies
  • trends
  • geographic location
  • climate zones
  • seasonal changes
  • data representation
  • comparison
  • temperature range
  • weather patterns
  • statistical analysis
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